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I Would like to welcome people to the server as a trusted and I also believe i deserve more respect
on mctopia.I think i would benefit the server if i were a trusted.I have been on the server about a
month and think that is long enough to get trusted. If i were trusted i would only use my commands
for good,/clear would be used to clear my inventory when needed,/suicide if i wanted to kill myself, and
finally /back to regain peoples stuff if they died to traps, holes,etc.
I would overall not abuse any of my commands in any way.
sincerely,
Daniel02112003
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Hi!
So I think the actual content of your app is good, but there are a few things that could be adjusted for maximum potential.
a. Put the application in a different format. Right now you listed a bunch of qualities that make you a good Trusted. It'd be a little better if you put all your points in a paragraph instead of a list.
b. Clean up your grammar on this app.
And if you just do those two, you'll be good to go!
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I think you should make the font paragraph form not a list.
 Your Friendly Friend, Liam4903
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I agree with Liam.
Try looking at my trusted app to get an idea
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Making a list of things does not mean anything, it just makes the app worse, in my opinion. I suggest typing down a paragraph instead of making some list.
 Farewell to all, I'll miss you.
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Arent you new? If so i suggest you wait some time.
Also, you cant clear others inventory if you get Trusted, and filling inventories dont lag the server.
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tobiii1004 wrote:Hi!
So I think the actual content of your app is good, but there are a few things that could be adjusted for maximum potential.
a. Put the application in a different format. Right now you listed a bunch of qualities that make you a good Trusted. It'd be a little better if you put all your points in a paragraph instead of a list.
b. Clean up your grammar on this app.
And if you just do those two, you'll be good to go! It's amazing how smart you sound...
ITTTSS WAARRMM HEERREE SUCKKKAAZZZ
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You should make your app longer and you should put "I" not "i"...but other than that your good to go!  " title="Very Happy"> Your friendly friend, Liam4903
Your Friendly Friend, Liam4903
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Read the guidelines written by me.
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xXSlurpieXx wrote:tobiii1004 wrote:Hi!
So I think the actual content of your app is good, but there are a few things that could be adjusted for maximum potential.
a. Put the application in a different format. Right now you listed a bunch of qualities that make you a good Trusted. It'd be a little better if you put all your points in a paragraph instead of a list.
b. Clean up your grammar on this app.
And if you just do those two, you'll be good to go!
It's amazing how smart you sound... I love you so so sooooooo much. xD
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