2014-01-23, 01:42 PM
theres always that one guy 125. listen i hate to do this. you seem nice enough, but i cant really get into your story. your grammar throws me off mostly, it just made the story not make sense, and your use of punctuation was was terrible.
when I was reading your story, i kept getting annoyed when i saw a case how your story may have rised too quickly. focus more on the little things. as silly as it sounds but like. add in how your staring at the sea. and talk about ripples and what they bring you great feeling of. you get what im saying?
it just. like. dont hate me for this. But I feel as though this could... have been rushed,its just what it seems like.
thankyou for posting your story and sharing it with us.
when I was reading your story, i kept getting annoyed when i saw a case how your story may have rised too quickly. focus more on the little things. as silly as it sounds but like. add in how your staring at the sea. and talk about ripples and what they bring you great feeling of. you get what im saying?
it just. like. dont hate me for this. But I feel as though this could... have been rushed,its just what it seems like.
thankyou for posting your story and sharing it with us.
Saying f*** you to people who hurt you feels really good.