The Sundance Tribe

[GoldenLynx54]

My deep orange hair sizzled in the rain as my tribe raced for shelter. A tall, gray mountain loomed above us , it's summit scraping the cloudy gray sky. The raindrops felt like ice on my pale skin. Only a few scattered embers around me were still burning, and smoking grass drooped in the weight of the water. Faint glows came from animal burrows, bushes and under fallen trees. I dived into a burrow along with my friend, Cardinal. We slowly dried off in our combined heat. We squeezed the moisture from our hair, and looked outside. Rain spattered outside, taunting us.


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