2014-01-25, 10:51 AM
zombielover99 wrote:Lol, I'm most likely not going to publish it, but why cant you post it online?
CHALL'S STORY
Chapter 1
Tyler and Jeff had just left Richwood Theatre, a huge theatre that was know for it's humongous arcade, and amazing selection of movies. Outside the theatre was a different story, it was very damp and musty, almost like a swamp. The street the theatre was positioned on had no sign of life except the bright light that indicated the movie theatre was closed.
Haha, I loved that movie! said Tyler to his friend Jeff. I did enjoy it, but after seeing it for the 100th time you start to lose interest. Replied Jeff. Jeff and Tyler had gone to see Galactic Space Alien Warriors, or as most people call them, Warians, the very popular new movie. Have you heard this movie is going to be the top grossing movie of all time in two days at this rate. Tyler said. I cant wait for Galactic Space Alien Warriors 2 to come out, hey you look down all of the sudden Jeff, what's the matter? Jeff didn't reply but simply pointed towards a sign above the gigantic door that led into the movie theatre, it read Movie Theatre Closing Next Month, Thank You Loyal Customers, We With You The Best. The movie theatre is closing. Tyler thought. This is our favourite movie theatre though
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Are you sure about this? Asked Melvin. I mean what if it doesn't work and the cat gets hypothermia or something? What, even the class clown is too wimpy to do this. Laughed Tyler. Come on guys, it will be HILARIOUS! Tyler was planning on dumping Mrs. Schnitzers cat into a big bucket of water while Mrs. Schnitzer(the leanest, meanest teacher in school) was on a lunch break. I'm sorry Tyler, but even I'm out on this one! Jeff stated. Yeah what if you get caught, you'll be in some major trouble... Warned Jessica. Tyler had never been one to care about trouble until it came, and he certainly wasn't going to start now. Well I guess when this gets noted as the funniest prank in the world I can take all the credit for it. Tyler said, proudly. Soon enough everyone had scurried out of the classroom to avoid being caught near Tyler if he somehow got busted, everyone knows that when it comes to this school, whoever is at the scene is the criminal. Tyler unlocked the cage of the teachers cat, carried her over to the bucket of water, he was about to throw the cat in when he heard the knob on the door twist. A milli-second later Mrs. Schnitzer was staring a Tyler mid-act, face more red then a tomato. Tyler was in deep, deep doo-doo.
Well, that's end of chapter 1, if you enjoyed let me know and I'll continue editing more chapters into this post whenever I can!
Thanks!
-Zombeh
Hey guys, I'm writing a book and I was hoping you guys could review it, here is the first chapter
Chapter 1
Tyler and Jeff had just left Richwood Theatre, a huge theatre that was know for it's humongous arcade, and amazing selection of movies. Outside the theatre was a different story, it was very damp and musty, almost like a swamp. The street the theatre was positioned on had no sign of life except the bright light that indicated the movie theatre was closed.
Haha, I loved that movie! said Tyler to his friend Jeff. I did enjoy it, but after seeing it for the 100th time you start to lose interest. Replied Jeff. Jeff and Tyler had gone to see Galactic Space Alien Warriors, or as most people call them, Warians, the very popular new movie. Have you heard this movie is going to be the top grossing movie of all time in two days at this rate. Tyler said. I cant wait for Galactic Space Alien Warriors 2 to come out, hey you look down all of the sudden Jeff, what's the matter? Jeff didn't reply but simply pointed towards a sign above the gigantic door that led into the movie theatre, it read Movie Theatre Closing Next Month, Thank You Loyal Customers, We With You The Best. The movie theatre is closing. Tyler thought. This is our favourite movie theatre though
...
Are you sure about this? Asked Melvin. I mean what if it doesn't work and the cat gets hypothermia or something? What, even the class clown is too wimpy to do this. Laughed Tyler. Come on guys, it will be HILARIOUS! Tyler was planning on dumping Mrs. Schnitzers cat into a big bucket of water while Mrs. Schnitzer(the leanest, meanest teacher in school) was on a lunch break. I'm sorry Tyler, but even I'm out on this one! Jeff stated. Yeah what if you get caught, you'll be in some major trouble... Warned Jessica. Tyler had never been one to care about trouble until it came, and he certainly wasn't going to start now. Well I guess when this gets noted as the funniest prank in the world I can take all the credit for it. Tyler said, proudly. Soon enough everyone had scurried out of the classroom to avoid being caught near Tyler if he somehow got busted, everyone knows that when it comes to this school, whoever is at the scene is the criminal. Tyler unlocked the cage of the teachers cat, carried her over to the bucket of water, he was about to throw the cat in when he heard the knob on the door twist. A milli-second later Mrs. Schnitzer was staring a Tyler mid-act, face more red then a tomato. Tyler was in deep, deep doo-doo.
Well, that's end of chapter 1, if you enjoyed let me know and I'll continue editing more chapters into this post whenever I can!
Thanks!
-Chall
