REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY

[tobiii1004]

What is going on?

My grip on Jack's hand tightened as we---rather, I---was greeted by shrieks of "ALICE!" and "We missed you so much!" and "Where were you?"

What is this?!

I tried to wake myself up from this daze. "Um, hi everyone!"

Everyone smiled.

"My name is Talinella. Nice to meet you guys."

Confusion crossed their faces. A moment of silence fell.

A fox girl with black hair stepped up.

"I'm Ahri."

I smiled. At least she didn't think I was crazy for not knowing her.

"I'm Talinella, but you can call me Talon."

One boy let out a sharp exhale. I guess he had bad history with Talon...a lot of people did. A girl with copper hair and green eyes rushed to his side. "Calm down, James." I guess he was James.

James glared at me. I stepped away from him instinctively.

Ahri came up to Jack.

"And who is this?" Her eyelids lowered, and she put her hands on his shoulders. Jack's face stayed calm, he stayed cool, and he put his arms around me from behind. I growled.

"My boyfriend." Brushing her hands off of him, I said "Hands off."

Ahri stepped back in shock.

"Alice...you know I was kidding."

I raised my eyebrows. "Alice? Who's Alice?"

Ahri stepped back in sad disappointment. "Bye, Alice..." she whispered.

James, the boy who hated me, came up. He wasn't so angry now, or so it seemed. He just seemed curious.

"Talon?" he called.

"So we meet again. I remember you." My voice took a double edge, like it did when someone channeled the inner Spirit inside me.

"Alice?" he tried.

"I honestly don't know who Alice is, guys...sorry...my name's Talinella but you can call me Talon." I repeated. Did these guys hear me? I wasn't Alice. My name is Talinella! My name is...

Alice.

I fell backwards, feeling Jack's arms catch me.

I blacked out from all the memories crashing into my head at once.

[BrookeTheSheep]

im writing
(i write too much)

[tobiii1004]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:im writing
(i write too much)

Lol I write SO much.....

[Metazard]

I used to till I got writers block

[BrookeTheSheep]

"Your name is Jack, right?" I said.
"Yeah. I'm Talon's boyfriend," he replied.
"Well, we are Alice's family. Back off. You didn't get my approval," I said, defiantly steeping towards him.
"Do I need it?" Jack countered.
"Yes," I snapped back, taking another step forward, my nose inches away from his.
Then Jack reached out, and touched my shoulder to calm me down.
James had him in a headlock in seconds.
"You touch her one more time, and I will snap your neck" James said.
"Ah- S- sorry" Jack spluttered.
James released him.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were all over Alice in no time. She had her head resting on a pillow, and was laying by the fireplace within a minute.
James had his arm tightly around me.
Jack sat awkwardly at the table.
James and I were discussing my new name. We had a few ideas.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were talking to eachother about what just happened.
Jack picked moss of the table.
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Epic ending, right? I love moss xD
Anyway, I'll make a poll for Pure's new name. We will pick a top 2, and i'll pick from there.

[tobiii1004]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:"Your name is Jack, right?" I said.
"Yeah. I'm Talon's boyfriend," he replied.
"Well, we are Alice's family. Back off. You didn't get my approval," I said, defiantly steeping towards him.
"Do I need it?" Jack countered.
"Yes," I snapped back, taking another step forward, my nose inches away from his.
Then Jack reached out, and punched me in the face.
James had him in a headlock in seconds.
"You touch her one more time, and I will snap your neck" James said.
"Ah- S- sorry" Jack spluttered.
James released him.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were all over Alice in no time. She had her head resting on a pillow, and was laying by the fireplace within a minute.
James had his arm tightly around me, and was holding a bag of ice to my eye, where Jack punched me. It wasn't a hard punch, more like a warning. I was still getting a bruise.
Jack sat awkwardly at the table.
James and I were discussing my new name. We had a few ideas.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were talking to eachother about what just happened.
Jack picked moss of the table.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Epic ending, right? I love moss xD
Anyway, I'll make a poll for Pure's new name. We will pick a top 2, and i'll pick from there.

AIGHT I AIN'T APPROVING OF THAT

edit jack. He's not one to punch people.... Please!!!!! XD



Please boo...I'm serious this is actually kind of botherin me. T.T

[GemuFoxxx]

that is false pure! if jack DARED to punch you, forget alice! he would have died of foxy death!

[BrookeTheSheep]

tobiii1004 wrote:

BrookeTheSheep wrote:"Your name is Jack, right?" I said.
"Yeah. I'm Talon's boyfriend," he replied.
"Well, we are Alice's family. Back off. You didn't get my approval," I said, defiantly steeping towards him.
"Do I need it?" Jack countered.
"Yes," I snapped back, taking another step forward, my nose inches away from his.
Then Jack reached out, and punched me in the face.
James had him in a headlock in seconds.
"You touch her one more time, and I will snap your neck" James said.
"Ah- S- sorry" Jack spluttered.
James released him.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were all over Alice in no time. She had her head resting on a pillow, and was laying by the fireplace within a minute.
James had his arm tightly around me, and was holding a bag of ice to my eye, where Jack punched me. It wasn't a hard punch, more like a warning. I was still getting a bruise.
Jack sat awkwardly at the table.
James and I were discussing my new name. We had a few ideas.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were talking to eachother about what just happened.
Jack picked moss of the table.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Epic ending, right? I love moss xD
Anyway, I'll make a poll for Pure's new name. We will pick a top 2, and i'll pick from there.

AIGHT I AIN'T APPROVING OF THAT

edit jack. He's not one to punch people.... Please!!!!! XD



Please boo...I'm serious this is actually kind of botherin me. T.T

How would you feel if some random girl walked up to you, said she knew your gf/bf, and that she didn't approve. My nose was an INCHES away from his.
It is only natural.

[tobiii1004]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:

tobiii1004 wrote:

BrookeTheSheep wrote:"Your name is Jack, right?" I said.
"Yeah. I'm Talon's boyfriend," he replied.
"Well, we are Alice's family. Back off. You didn't get my approval," I said, defiantly steeping towards him.
"Do I need it?" Jack countered.
"Yes," I snapped back, taking another step forward, my nose inches away from his.
Then Jack reached out, and punched me in the face.
James had him in a headlock in seconds.
"You touch her one more time, and I will snap your neck" James said.
"Ah- S- sorry" Jack spluttered.
James released him.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were all over Alice in no time. She had her head resting on a pillow, and was laying by the fireplace within a minute.
James had his arm tightly around me, and was holding a bag of ice to my eye, where Jack punched me. It wasn't a hard punch, more like a warning. I was still getting a bruise.
Jack sat awkwardly at the table.
James and I were discussing my new name. We had a few ideas.
Ahri, Avi, and Coli were talking to eachother about what just happened.
Jack picked moss of the table.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Epic ending, right? I love moss xD
Anyway, I'll make a poll for Pure's new name. We will pick a top 2, and i'll pick from there.

AIGHT I AIN'T APPROVING OF THAT

edit jack. He's not one to punch people.... Please!!!!! XD



Please boo...I'm serious this is actually kind of botherin me. T.T

How would you feel if some random girl walked up to you, said she knew your gf/bf, and that she didn't approve. My nose was an INCHES away from his.
It is only natural.

But punching you. Really? XD XD XD at least change it to putting his hands on your shoulders and stepping away politely...or something...less..lame...

[tobiii1004]

GemuFoxxx wrote:that is false pure! if jack DARED to punch you, forget alice! he would have died of foxy death!

o.O DONT TOUCH JACK! XD XD XD

but see, purity. Ahri agrees.