REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY

[BrookeTheSheep]

challenger410 wrote:

BrookeTheSheep wrote:

challenger410 wrote:foreshadowing " title="Very Happy"> that's gonna be trouble

No it's not xD
I just like smiley faces

James and Chives hate each other, so thats gonna be a problemo

ooo.
Chapter idea.

I'M WRITING NOW

[BrookeTheSheep]

It's 11 PM. I head into my room to see Chives in my bed.
"CHIVES. OUT," I command.
"Wha-" he stammered. "Purrrrre. But where will I sleep?"
"Where Alice used to sleep," I told him. I grabbed the few items he had, and walked over to the boys' room. Plopping down the stuff under Alice's old bed, I said "Your new room. Now the boys have their own room. You, Mason (when he is here), and James"
"No way. I am NOT sharing a room with James. He wants to take away your purity." he said, "And," he continued, lowering his voice, "I don't think James likes me"
"No duh, sherlock." I said.
"See?! You purity is slipping away! If that boy wasn't here, you wouldn't of been so rude!" he retorted.
"If I has to chose between my purity, and James, i'd pick James. It is MY choice, not yours!" I countered.
"I am your older brother! I WANT WHAT IS BEST FOR YOU!" he shouted.
"Everything ok?" James said, walking in the room.
"NO!" we both shouted.
"I CAN'T HAVE IT. YOU ARE LEAVING. AND NEVER COMING BACK!" Chives screamed.
"NO! You can't make me!" I snapped back.
"Watch me." Chives said. He picked me up. I fought back, but I was very weak. James started to transform.
"NO JAMES!" I shouted.
"Why?! He is going to take you! I CAN'T LOSE YOU AGAIN!" He cried.
"Chives is STRONG, James. He could and WILL hurt you! Ahri is weak, and couldn't heal you guys! If she tried, she would DIE! And so would you! I CAN'T LOSE CHIVES!
I CAN'T LOSE YOU! " I shouted at the top of my lungs.
"Pure! I would, and WILL die for you!" James started.
"You know what happens if my True One dies? I DIE. WE CAN'T DO THAT. JUST LET US GO!" I cried.
Stepping back, James said, "I'll find you. I'll save you."
Chives carried me downstairs, and out the door.
"I love you!" I screamed back.
"I... I love you to Pure." James said.
"DON'T FORGET ME!" I shouted. Chives was moving fast, and I could barely hear his reply.
"I WON'T!" James screamed.
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[BrookeTheSheep]

Oh my god. 463 posts on this topic :o

[tobiii1004]

The following morning was like every other one.

Jack and I were inseparable. Everywhere one went, the other followed. I softened his heart. I began breaking through his cool outer shell, and it revealed a warm, kind guy underneath the smirking outside layer.

Curled on the couch, we sat together watching some romantic comedy. Well, not really watching. Just letting the movie play as background noise while we sat there and enjoyed each others' presence. It was a warm, happy little mushy-gushy scene.

I was lost in thought. That bird girl was troubling me. It was mean how Peregrine was going to kill her pet dragon, but there was something underneath that. I felt a strange connection to this girl...a big sisterly connection. And I knew that Peregrine wasn't going to stop at killing her pet. She was going to delve much deeper, into deeper layers that would never heal. She would traumatize this girl, and kill her from the inside out.

"You okay love?" Jack looked down at me, his gray bunny ears cocking slightly.

I beamed. "I'm fine. Just give me a second." I hummed my tune, and the mirror came to me. Jack watched in silence.

"Mirror..." I said. The mirror and I were good friends. The mirror actually had a soul and a personality. It was just like a person...just with a body that was a handheld mirror.

"Hi Talon. How are you." The mirror was prim and proper, but could be sarcastic and rowdy and all around a whole lot of fun.

"Show me...the bird girl that Peregrine wants."

A girl appeared on the mirror. She was yawning...I suppose she had just woken up. She got up and inspected her back in a large mirror on the wall. What was she looking for?

"She's looking for wings." The mirror knew me so well, it knew what I was thinking. It couldn't read thoughts, it was just very well acquainted with how I work.

"Tell me everything you know about her."

"Well I know everything about her, how do you expect me to do so...?" I could hear the smile in Mirror's voice. I rolled my eyes.

"Just give me the basics."

"Fine. She's half bird, half girl. She has a pet dragon, which is a Platinaria brought from the dark side." I could hear the surprise in her voice.

"She's young. The youngest in her family. And she's destined to marry a bird-boy of her kind."

"You forgot her name."

"Excuse me?"

"Her NAME, Mirror." I rolled my eyes. Jack snickered. He thought it was funny how I was talking to Mirror so casually, like a real person. Mirror's real name was Reflecta, but I called her Mirror.

"Oh. Her name. Avi."

A bell went off in my head. I remembered that name from somewhere, I don't know where, though.

"Okay mirror. Thanks."

"Your wish is my command." She put on a snooty, butler-like voice.

She lingered in the air, hanging there.

"Um, Mirror...leave us alone!" I laughed. The roses carved into Mirror's sides turned bright red, her way of blushing.

"Sorry." Mirror quickly flitted away.

I laughed and curled myself into Jack's arms, now fully tucked under his hold. It was my favorite place to be, secured in his hold like that.

"How are you, my favorite Slovakian Wedgehorn." I bopped his nose, like someone taught me. I don't remember who taught me to bop noses, all I remember was them doing it to me repetitively.

"I'm good. How are you, my favorite Platinara." He tucked my hair behind my ear. I blew it back.

"I don't like my hair behind my ears."

"I do."

I huffed. "Fine." I let him tuck it behind my ear again.

Curled up, I started to drift off.

I don't NEED a portal to go to Spirit Land.

The other way to get there is to think about it before you sleep.

And that's what I did.

I met a certain bird-girl while I was there.

[BrookeTheSheep]

And the plot lines start to re-intersect.

[tobiii1004]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:And the plot lines start to re-intersect.

Im trying to tie the loose ends! XD I'm tired of not remembering you guys.

[challenger410]

I'm killing jack, i Don't care what you say xD lol jk

[tobiii1004]

challenger410 wrote:I'm killing jack, i Don't care what you say xD lol jk

lol.

dontkilljack.

If you do...i already started writing, btw C:

[GemuFoxxx]

i heard a knock on the door. i walked over to go get it, but emma was already there. when she opened it, it was chives. that explains why she was there to open it... Chives looked worried.
"Is there something wrong?" emma said in her loving voice.
"I need to speak with ahri" he said to emma, and started walking twords me
"My tribe, they are planning to invade this place. they want to kill james so that pure will never lose her purity. i broke off from the tribe to warn you, but they wouldnt let me bring pure.
"WHAT?!?!?!?!?" I Screamed
"I acted SO stupidly then, i wish i could change what i have done." he said sincerely. I calmed myself down, this was not a time to be angry
"How many?" i asked
"around around 50 - 60, they are bringing the whole tribe." he replied
"emma? do you think we can handle it? we have Colli, Me, You, and James." i said to her.
"Do they have any special abilities?" emma asked chives.
"Not really, but they are GREAT fighters. and the leaders are the strongest of the bunch..."
"How many leaders?" i asked
"Three" he replied
"How long do we have?" i asked
"About a week" he said back. I sighed, i would have to teach colli a set of damaging magic within a week... perhaps we could get repaire to help also... i will NOT allow avi into the battle. and i really dont think mason is willing to come out of the woods.
"The leaders are Courage, Fortitude, and Fear."
"Fear?" emma asked curiosly "Arent your kind named after good emotions?" she inquired
"They ran out" he shrugged "I would take care when it comes to her, she can make you lose faith in everything in an instant."
emma laughed "She has never met me, ill show her REAL fear!" She grinned, showing her fangs
"Who, is this "Fortitude"? chives?" i asked. i had might as well know about the rest of the leaders, they will put up the biggest fight...
"She is a priest, she specializes in magic such as healing and shields." he said matter of factly
"Easy target for colli, she only has so long to learn a set of spells, so we sould give her fortitude."
"She is an easy target, but she is protected by Courage. Courage is the decision maker of the tribe. HE is the one who decided to take pure back. be careful with him, he is like a WALL. not easily taken down." chives informed me.
"Emma, would you help me with him please? i wont be able to take him down alone." i told her.
She looked dissapointed
"But i wanted to take down Fear!" She pouted.
"Ill let colli handle her until we take courage down, then you can show her REAL fear" i smiled.
"How come you cant take down courage alone?" Chives asked tentatively "You could take me down easily in one go." i flinched when he reminded me of how i almost killed him
"I am a mage assassin, i SPECIALIZE in taking people down in one go. however, if they dont go down in one go there is a high chance of me being defeated. mage spells can only be cast so often, you cant cast the spells consecutively. the cooldown isnt THAT long, its only a few seconds, but i could be taken down in a few seconds. THAT is why i need emma's help. she relies on her physical attacks more than her spells, dealing constant damage." i said.
"you can count on me." emma said, smiling "I heard you have always wanted to taste their kind anyway! to be honest, i kind of want to also." And with that said, we were preparing our little family against an army.

[GemuFoxxx]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:It's 11 PM. I head into my room to see Chives in my bed.
"CHIVES. OUT," I command.
"Wha-" he stammered. "Purrrrre. But where will I sleep?"
"Where Alice used to sleep," I told him. I grabbed the few items he had, and walked over to the boys' room. Plopping down the stuff under Alice's old bed, I said "Your new room. Now the boys have their own room. You, Mason (when he is here), and James"
"No way. I am NOT sharing a room with James. He wants to take away your purity." he said, "And," he continued, lowering his voice, "I don't think James likes me"
"No shit, sherlock." I said.
"See?! You purity is slipping away! If that boy wasn't here, you wouldn't of cursed!" he retorted.
"If I has to chose between my purity, and James, i'd pick James. It is MY choice, not yours!" I countered.
"I am your older brother! I WANT WHAT IS BEST FOR YOU!" he shouted.
"Everything ok?" James said, walking in the room.
"NO!" we both shouted.
"I CAN'T HAVE IT. YOU ARE LEAVING. AND NEVER COMING BACK!" Chives screamed.
"NO! You can't make me!" I snapped back.
"Watch me." Chives said. He picked me up. I fought back, but I was very weak. James started to transform.
"NO JAMES!" I shouted.
"Why?! He is going to take you! I CAN'T LOSE YOU AGAIN!" He cried.
"Chives is STRONG, James. He could and WILL hurt you! Ahri is weak, and couldn't heal you guys! If she tried, she would DIE! And so would you! I CAN'T LOSE CHIVES!
I CAN'T LOSE YOU! " I shouted at the top of my lungs.
"Pure! I would, and WILL die for you!" James started.
"You know what happens if my True One dies? I DIE. WE CAN'T DO THAT. JUST LET US GO!" I cried.
Stepping back, James said, "I'll find you. I'll save you."
Chives carried me downstairs, and out the door.
"I love you!" I screamed back.
"I... I love you to Pure." James said.
"DON'T FORGET ME!" I shouted. Chives was moving fast, and I could barely hear his reply.
"I WON'T!" James screamed.
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Ahri? Weak? LOL i took chives down in 5 seconds.