REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY

[SilverWolf101]

GemuFoxxx wrote:okie, WRIIITE GOLDEN. / COLLI, WRIIITTTEEE
*assumes you know she is writing scince you live in the same house*

She is next to meh. On the IPad. On the chair. THE CHAAAAIR o.o

[GoldenLynx54]

lol " title="Razz"> I'm writing naow because I couldn't get on earlier.
Chapter 3
I wake up in the morning, right at the crack of dawn. Pink is leaking into the sky and clouds so I rush towards the door. No one would see me anyway. as I sneak past Avi's room, I hear a moan. It sounded low. Quiet. Pained. Inching open the door, I tiptoe in with my ears erect and alert. My gold eyes search out Avi, laying soundless in her bed. Creepin forward to her, she has purple bruises on her face and arms. Gasping, I grab some makeshift bandages, pages out of a book. I hope they aren't important. Avi is mumbling incomprehensibly. trying to make sense of what is going on, I say, "It'll be alright Avi. Pretend this is an adventure! I'll be back soon." After about half an hour I'm back with some slightly stale bread to feed Avi. she has a big scar running down her shoulder blade. accidently dropping the bread, I fumble with it half scared to death. blood sinks into the nearby feathers and skin. Taking off pages from the bruises, I pile them onto the wound. "I wish Ahri was here, she knows EVERYTHING about healing!" Sighing, I get clean bread while munching on the stale bread. I then realize several minutes later that I can wake Ahri up. Dashing to her room, I prod her in the eyes and say, "AHRIIIII! Avi needs medicel attenshun!" Ahri's eyes open wide, but are glazed with drowsiness. she stands up and falters, but I can tell she thinks Avi just "bruised a knee." Looking at her worriedly I say, "It's serious." Of course, like all other people- or creatures- she thinks I am exaggerating about it being serious. Tugging on her arm, I pull her to Avi's dark room. My skin is pale and I'm sweating hard. Ahri senses this and walks without the tug on her arm. "is there blood, hon?" I nod slowly, scared. "Now Colli, how did it happen? It's 4:00 in the morning." Shaking my head, I whisper, "It appeared out of nowhere. she moaned and mumbled and... I'm so worried!" Ahri opens the door, and strides into the darkness towards the candle by Avi's bed.

[GoldenLynx54]

I tag...DARKETH VADERETH! wait, no, Silvereth Wolfieth!

[SilverWolf101]

The strange figure walks closer. I realize we left a window open and he squeezes through. I realize I'm shivering, then I fluff up my feathers to try and show I'm not scared.
"You must be Avi" He assumes. His voice was strong and loud. He had a bold appearance. His feathers were shades of browns and grays. His ambers eyes seemed as if he could read my thoughts. I nod.
"An-And who are YOU?" I say trying not to sound scared.
"I am Talon. As you can see, I am one like you." He says. He seems to read my mind.
"You are in The Spirit LAnd"

To be continued later

[GemuFoxxx]

I see how serious her wounds are and i call my orb to my side. when it gets here, i walk over to avi and watch her looking intent at the window and talking to herself.
"Avi? are you alright?" what a stupid question. its not like she has serious wounds all over her body! i begin the process to heal avi's wounds. my orb glows a green color, not like the color when i am stealing souls, a softer, more reassuring color. her wounds begin to close when she gets a shocked expression on her face, wherever her mind was, it was not here. i wondered what she could be doing in her own little world... I leave her in her bed when the wounds finish healing and start talking with colli. "How do you think it happened?" i asked
"I dont know, i just heard a low moan while i was passing her room and went to check on her" Colli replied.
"Very strange indeed, we may have to ask her when she is out of that trance" i said
"Ahri? would yo mind giving me some more magic lessons? it might help calm me down."
"It might calm me down too, i think ill do it." while we were downstairs, i think we woke somebody up because we heard footsteps coming down.
"I wonder who that could be..." Colli said.
"I dont know, it sounds like two pairs of feet, one of them are male, one female" i replied, alert.
"How can you tell?" Colli asked, astonished at my amazing hearing
"Its quite easy to distinguish if you think about it, male footsteps are more clunky and loud. while females are more cautious or considerate." i said back. when they got here we saw it was Emma and a very attractive boy. me and colli's stances changed at the same time, to more flirtatious. foxes are known for their flirtatiousness. we exchanged looks and our fox minds told us we were both thinking the same thing. i subtly jerked me head twords him.
"Ahri, Colli, we have a new guest in the house. This is Robby" she gestured to the boy
"Its nice to meet you" i said in a seductive voice as i stepped twords them "I hope we can get to know each-other better" and i gave an indicative smile. Colli smiled at Robby and winked, in a more subtle but noticeable way. this house has never been so fun

END OF CHAPTER 3
(or 4 xD idk)

[GoldenLynx54]

Who's turn!?!?! I want to write lol

[tobiii1004]

I call writing after golden!

I never made a character, but to sum it a up, I'm half-human half bunny. That's just the BASIC feel of the character...

[SilverWolf101]

I need to finish mine. My mom took the IPad away from meeee.

Talon continued to tell me about the Spirit Land.
"So is it only us two?" I wonder.
"No. there are some others." He replies.
"Why have you come to me though? I'm sure you didn't come here to chat." I ask.
"This "family" of yours... You cannot trust them" He begins
"Wha-?" I begin to say when we interrupts.
"They are using, well are going to use you. The don't really care for you." He continues to tell lies. Im not sure if I should believe him or not.
"You have two choices. You stay with your so called family, or you can join my side, and stop them. Your choice" He tells me. I blink.
What? Should I believe him? Talon, someone I JUST met. In a strange land like this! I won't believe him.
"I am staying with my family! They were always at my side!" I shout at him. "I don't believe you!"
"Wrong choice" He growls. He lunges forward and slashes my shoulder. Everything goes black for about 4 seconds. Then I open my eyes And blink twice.
Ahri notices the mumbles have stopped.
"She's back!" She shouts.
Back? I wonder.

[SilverWolf101]

Tobii right!
Write*

[GoldenLynx54]

Hmmmm. Is Talon going to visit several of the family members but disguised? Or is the- nevermind. O.O