REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY

[SilverWolf101]

tobiii1004 wrote:It was cold. So cold outside. My soft pink feet patted against the snow, my fluffy white ears shivering. I was small. Very small. Why? Because now I was a bunny. That was one of my forms...bunny form. I had four of them: human, bunny, half-and-half, and another odd form that no one but me knew about.

Upon my shivering and stumbling, I came across a large house. At least there was a few lanterns in the front. The doorstep wasn't too snowy, so I huddled up next to the door and tried to sleep. Tucking my ears, I drifted off, my whole body shaking and accumulating ice. Suddenly, the door opened. I had been leaning against the door, so I fell in, little white paws grasping the floor, searching for something, anything to steady myself on. Unfortunately, there was nothing to steady myself, so my padded pink paws clambered at nothing.

My big innocent eyes looked up. A pretty girl with pointed ears and foxlike facial features looked down at me. She smiled and her gaze softened, but something about her frazzled hair and wild eyes told me that something was wrong, very wrong. She scooped me into her arms and ran upstairs. I heard her murmur, "You poor thing. You'll be my new pet bunny." I was met by chaos. There was a girl with feathers and a beak bleeding all over the floor. Another fox girl was trying to wake up the bird-girl. The first fox girl set me on the windowsill, and bundled me in a warm towel. She ran to the bird girl's aid.

The bird girl was twitching and talking in her slumber. Something about spirits and stuff. The first wolf girl screamed out "Colli!" To the other wolf girl. I guess her name was Colli. Colli responded quickly with catlike sounds and words that I assumed to be some sort of fox language. I later discovered she was just mumbling pretty quickly. Stress and tension draped the room like a thick black curtain. The bird girl was regaining consciousness. Her limbs flailed and her feathers stood on end. She began twitching and jerking.

Finally her eyes fluttered open and her body stopped moving. The calm after the storm. She sat up, running her eyes over her wounds. Everything about her facial features had a haunted look. She opened her mouth to speak but nothing came out. She had the look of a drowning animal, wide-eyed, pale-faced, dry-throated appearance.

"T-T-Talon..." She stammered.

Then she passed out again. I knew she wouldn't remember any of that...but no matter. She awoke and began watching TV...

I sat with her. She fell asleep again, her two long fingers petting the star-shape on my back. My fluffy ears flattened as I began to feel a warm, pooling sensation in my stomach. Suddenly a blast of comfortable heat rose up in me. My eyes squeezed shut. I began to transform.

A blinding flash of white, and I exploded into a girl form. I was a teenager, with black, curly hair. My skin glowed a pale alabaster white. Often confused for a vampire, since my eyes were a dark red shade. It was only natural. A lot of bunnies had a reddish tint to their eyes. So I wore blue contacts, making my eyes purple.

I sat there on the couch, in human form, with a hint of cute bunny-esque-ness. The first fox girl came in, shocked to see me.

"Who are you?!"

I smiled. "I'm Alice, and I'm your new pet bunny."

Woo! The awesome writer strikes again!