REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY

[SilverWolf101]

BrookeTheSheep wrote:"Purity?" a voice said
"Wha- Who said that?" I asked.
It was mid afternoon, and I was out gathering apples. I wanted to make a special "welcome back" meal for Alice, but we didn't have apples.
"Me, Purity! You best friend! Don't you remember?" the voice said.
"I'm sorry, where are you? Who are you?" I asked.
"It is me, True." the voice said.
"TRUE!" I shouted.
True was my friend when I was a little girl. She was part of the fairy clan.
"I heard that you found your True One!' True said.
"Umm... Where are you?" I said.
Turning around, I saw a tiny pink fairy fluttering in the air.
Giggling, True said, "Right here, silly! Now, tell me about everything. And i mean everything"
I did. I told her about the kingdom falling, Ahri finding me, the family, James, Alice, and me losing my purity.
"Now, where have YOU been?" I inquired.
"Well... When the kingdom fell, I only survived because I could fly. All the fay survived. We live in peace in a big tree. Word got around that there was a house in the clearing by the edge of the forest. I decided to check it out. I found you, and was very happy! I also found the camp of people trying to take you back. I didn't want to startle you. Also, I thought that some of your new family might be afraid of me. And think I was a spy. I was waiting until you entered the forest. And now here we are!" True said.
"May I introduce you to my family? I'm sure they won't be afraid, if I introduce you." I suggested.
"No no no. I must go. I don't have a lot of time here," said True, "I can give you something. A gift from the fay."
True pulled an orb out of her small backpack.
"Here. It is the Blessing Of The Fairies. It gives you the power to transform into a fairy. Wings and all! You can use it whenever you want. It is easy too! Just think hard about turning into a fairy, and BOOM! You are one!" True said, excitedly.
She handed it to me. As soon as I touched it, it burst into pink light. The pink light went into my head, and I had the feeling of being a bit more powerful.
"Try it out!" True stated.
"Be a fairy, be a fairy, be a fairy" I thought.
Suddenly, the world grew large. I felt a bit dizzy. I looked at my back, and sure enough, I had wings! I looked at True and smiled. I flew around for a bit.
"Do you like it?" True asked.
"I love it! Thank you True!" I exclaimed.
"Also, did you pick a new name yet?" said True.
"No, I haven't." I replied.
"What about Fay?"
"Hm... I like it. I'll talk it over with James."
"Oh no!" squealed True, "It is almost 4! I must go!"
Grasping my hand, True said, "I hope to see you again, Fay."
"Stop by the house any time."
"Ok, I will!" True said, happy again, "Goodbye now!"
"Bye, True!!"
I fluttered back home, carefree. I saw my best friend, I got a new power, AND a new name!
It couldn't be better.
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OOPS. Turns out this chapter is MAJORLY important.

YES.YOU CHOSE FAY! good job btw

[tobiii1004]

Yay!(:
Although I voted for True, I think Fay fits better...

I want to write but I'm falling asleep...sooo sleepy >.<

[Metazard]

Im really happy at the moment, I'm sitting on the roof watching the sunrise. It's been a while since 'Purity' lost her virtue, now she decided to have her name as Fay, I like the name, it's nice. Fay climbed up onto the roof and sat down next to me,
"Hey Fay" I said while smiling
She laughed and I got up and hugged her, we sat down together and watched the sunrise together, it sure was beautiful, I was about to say how nice she looked when I stuttered, a poison dart had hit the back of my neck.
"Fay, they're here." I said as I started to lose consciousness, "The army!" I started to lose control over my body which flopped onto the roof, I started falling off the roof, rolling and rolling until I fell off and started heading towards the ground, fast.
"James!" I hear Fay cry, I hit the ground with a large 'THUMP' and yelled out in agonising pain, I knew my left arm was broken and atleast two of my ribs but the pain didn't last long as I was loosing conciousness
"Fay, save yourself..." I mumbled as my eyes slowly rolled into the back of my head...

I woke up in a coffin, plenty of air so it must have just been put in the ground.
I started banging on the lid, trying to prise it open, it wouldn't budge with the dirt ontop of it...
'Ive got it!' I thought I myself. A lot of animals, such as my bear or lion, have large muscle tone they would be able to open easily! Of course, there was too little room in the coffin to shape shift. It was ok though because I figured, if I can take bear claws, why not bear muscles? I knew it sounded stupid but I was already running out of oxygen so I needed to do it anyways. I did the transformation and tried as hard as I could to open the door, but as soon as I started, pains got me from all over, I had burns, cuts and bruises and my bones were still broken.
'Dont give up, ever' I thought to my self, I pushed with all my, and a bears, might, screaming with all the pain I managed to lift the lid a tiny bit, moving the earth above...

[Metazard]

Basically, you guys won the battle, (You can tell how) but I was hit by suh a poisonous dart that it put me in a coma for months, then it got critical and you thought I was dead, you buried me with my mothers pendant on, and it's power helped me fight the poison.

[kittens1234]

AHHHH
None of us get to writethe battle..
Ah
wa it nevermine
too llazy to repeat it
we can just put the stuff in the middle ~~~~!!!
i hste typing upside own in th epipda

[tobiii1004]

The cheer of my return was gone next morning.

I was fast asleep. Jack was sleeping on an air bed next to my bed so he wouldn't feel awkward and alone.

THUNK!

My eyes shot open and I rocketed upright quicker than a bullet, shot from a gun. I tumbled off the bed, spinning in little pencil rolls. My hand fell on Jack'a peacefully sleeping figure. I shook him awake.

"Jack. Jack!"

"Mmmfph."

"Wake up!"

"...whaaa?" One eye opened.

"Jack there was a noise. I think something fell of the roof."

He gave me a "what?!" look.

Curious himself, we began to ready ourselves for the day. Once bunnies get up, they're up for good. We brushed our teeth, got dressed, everything. I had mirror get some of Jack's clothes. I carefully slipped a drawing of a Platinara dragon I drew ages ago into my pocket. Everywhere I went, the drawing went.

I gave him a carrot from my secret stash under the bed. If I didn't, James would turn into a rabbit or hawk and steal them.

Speaking of James, where was he? He was usually the second one up.

Jack and I snuck downstairs and out the back door. Circling the house, we found a terrible sight.

Purity, or Fay as we now call her, screaming down from the top of the roof.

And what was she screaming at?

James, unconscious and bloody.

On the ground.

Looking like he just took the three-story plunge from the roof. Together, Jack and I pulled him inside. But as we were walking, carrying him, a hand yanked James away and threw him on the ground. Spinning around, it was...what? Who was this guy? He was definitely someone I'd never seen. But he had a look of hatred so powerful. And it was directed right at James. Jack and I played tug-of-war with James's lifeless, limp body.

"FAY!" I screamed.

She was down there with me in a second, crying for James.

"Fay, take my place. Help Jack." Fay gave me...a funny look. I could tell she and Jack were...not friends.

"Fay. You have to get over this thing with Jack, whatever it is. It's the only way to save James. Please." A look of piercing sorrow crossed her, and in a flash, she was replacing my hands, yanking James away. She had a fire in her eyes, too.

As fast as a bunny can run (fast), I burst through the door and ran upstairs to wake everyone else. I'll start with the two foxes...they'll take the longest to get up. I exploded into Colli's and Ahri's room, screaming and shaking them.

"James! People! Help!" I glanced out their window, and saw something much worse. Jack and Fay didn't realize it down there, but from that third-story window, I saw the forest, and the many many people closing in on our house. Hiding in the forest.

I did the same for Avi and Emma. The boys were already up from the screaming. And Emma was a vampire, she didn't sleep. All we needed was to worry about James's safety.

We all rushed outside, just in time to rip James's limp form away from the guy pulling him back. Fay had a sick, disgusted look in her eyes at everyone on our opposing side...did she know them?

"SO WE MEET AGAIN." She snarled at everyone. My eyebrows shot up. I never heard Pur--I mean Fay---talk to anyone like that.

"Hello, Purity. Or should we call you Impurity?" The man who tried to kidnap James spoke up.

"Call me Fay."

"No. This boy has spoiled your Purity. He took away your virtue. Look at you. You're not the same virtue you were. You've become disgusting."

"Get out of here, Fear."

"Not until this boy has paid. You sicken me...Fay." He spat out her name. He looked disgusted."

Fay lunged at him.

Jack and I lugged James inside. Once we dropped him, Jack shot a curious look at me.

"You okay, Talon?"

I managed a weak smile. "I can't believe this war is going to break out right here. Right now..."

He nodded.

"Let's go."

And the two of us walked out. We realized everyone had gone into chaos. Since Fay lunged at "Fear", the others had become explosive. Ahri was over in the corner, battling a dozen of the people. Her nine tails were lit on fire...but not the fire that would hurt her. It was a fire from the spirit. One that she generated. Colli was lending her a hand, her one tail wrapping around two men and throwing them on the ground. Avi flew high in the air, landing on some weaker ones and taking them down. I was shocked. She was young, but a good fighter. Jack ran out and began fighting.

Leading us was Fay. She was battling Fear viciously, but Emma had stepped in and helped her out. Turns out, all of their planning about who-kills-who went down the drain. Fay was losing strength. I saw her falter. Fear, with fire in his eyes, swiped at her face. She fell to the ground, a rill of blood cascading in a deadly swirl down her cheek. Suddenly everything was set to reality...

I ran to aid her, but saw the hurt in her eyes. It wasn't physical hurt. It was the fact that Fear had called her disgusting. She was emotionally scarred by Fear. And Fear was someone who used to care for her, love her.

My vision tinted red. How dare he.

That idiot.

That beast.

That damned fool.

How dare he make...my little sister feel this way.

I looked down, and I saw that my Platinara drawing fluttered to the ground, facing me so I could see it perfectly.

My white bunny ears turned red. My eyes were crimson. My teeth turned into fangs and my hair turned black and platinum.

Like Platinara scales.

My voice took its double edge. And I felt the power I needed to take this. I seemed to pulse a glowing red aura.

"STOP." I said to...to everyone. The double edge in my voice, and the power surging through my veins amplified my voice. Suddenly my voice was louder than a rock concert, more intense than any police siren. All my family members, all the other tribe's members, stopped to stare at me.

I turned to Fear.

"HOW DARE YOU INSULT MY FAMILY." I advanced.

He held his ground. "She's my family. Not yours, you sick rabbit." He spat at me. It missed by two inches.

"FAY. AVI. BACK AWAY FROM ME. NOW." The two of them were closest to me...

Black light pulsed through my body as I ripped out of human form...and transformed into a dark, lovely creature.

A Platinara Dragon.

I glanced down at Fay, the double edge still in my voice. "This is how I'll help y'all out." For a second, I was Alice, eager to help. Then I was Talon. Ferocious and vicious to protect her family. I spread my black and silver wings out, covering my family so they could see, but they wouldn't be harmed.

I roared the signature Platinara call and breathed a long, white-hot jet of fire. Blowing fire down on many of the enemies, they ducked for cover. I stomped, scattering the idiots. Scooping up Fear in my grip, I made him look at me in my crimson irises. Before I threw him in the air and caught him in my teeth. Dropping his scared body into my hand, I flung him on the ground, but caught him when he tried to run.

"APOLOGIZE TO FAY."

"..N...N...Never..."

"I SUPPOSE I HAVE NO CHOICE THEN."

I picked him up, and breathed a long, hot jet of fire, singing half of him. I laughed cruelly.

"SCORN MY FAMILY, I'LL SCORN YOU." And I threw him on the ground.

I faced all the others of his kind.

"ALL OF YOU BEST BE RUNNING NOW."

And so they did.

[SilverWolf101]

MAH WINGS GREW IN! WOOOOO

[kittens1234]

After I helped Fay out, I jumped onto the roof. Imeditly, I felt dizzy, like in my dream. I heard Alice or Talon become a dragon and everyone leave, but It felt like It wasn't really there.I felt weak, and cold.Human.
I stumbled over the cornor, and a man apeared, with a stake. In the back of my mind, I knew I was going to die. My dream was coming true. Even if I felt human, I could still scream.
"ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh"
I heard footsteps, but the stake came down. Some last minute instinct happened, or someone threw me out of the way, but I was falling, still human, off a three story house. I hit the ground feet first. I heard a crack.
I sat down hard on my tailbone.
Another crack.
I put my hands to my head.
Blood.
Vampires don't bleed.

I looked up and saw someone falling, too weak to move, I struggled to get out of the way.

Ow. My ribs, now, were also broken. It was the man with the stake, and the glowing stick. Ahri was coming now, I could feel her footsteps in the earth. The ground was shaking, moving. A figure in a yellow t-shirt jumped off the roof and landed on the man's back. The stick broke, the glow faded. I felt normal. I healed instantly.
Cal, my savior, on the other hand, could not.
I picked up the man.

"Who are you"

"Shes gonna get you, you know. She hates you, for what you did to her...shes gonna get.." His voice faded off into nothing as he turned into ash.
Magic.
Amber.
Amber.
I fainted.

[SilverWolf101]

Mai turn

[BrookeTheSheep]

"NO! NO! JAMES!" I screamed.
I saw someone run to James.
No no no...
I couldn't process anything... I didn't know... I DIDN'T CARE.
"JAMES! NO! You can't leave me! YOU CAN'T DO THIS!" I sobbed.
I climbed off the roof.
Grabbing James' hand, I nearly passed out. I felt more pain then I ever had before.
The world was a blur.
"Fay... Place... Jack" someone said.
I looked up angry. Not Jack!
"Fay... Get over... Jack... Save... James..."
I looked up to see someone standing there.
I took James out of the person's hands.
Then... FEAR was there. Trying to take James!
"So we meet again?" I said, the world coming into focus.
"Hello, Purity. Or should we call you Impurity?" Fear said.
"Call me Fay." I demanded.
"NO. This boy has spoiled your purity! He took away your virtue! Look at you. You're not the same virtue you were. You've become disgusting."
This COULDN'T be Fear. Not my Fear. Not the one who I thought was my True One. My friend, my lover. Not my Fear.
"Get out of here, Fear."
"Not until this boy has paid. You sicken me... Fay," Fear said, disgusted.
I ran to Fear, and tried to punch him. Suddenly, everyone was fighting.
I was beating up Fear, but he started to use his power.
"Fay... James is dead... It was for nothing... True is dead too..." a cold voice whispered.
"No. NO! It couldn't be the truth. True is fine... So is James!" I said to Fear.
I wasn't very strong, and Emma came in to help me.
I missed a punch. It all went downhill from there. Fear landed a hard kick in my face, and I fell to the ground. All I saw was my own blood.
"Fay? It is me! True! I'm not sure if this will work, but if you can here me, don't worry! We are sending the fairies to battle!" True said. She wasn't there, but she spoke to me. She spoke to me through my orb.
"Help..." I thought.
I was laying on the ground, pretending to be unconscious. I was actually talking to True.
"Turn into a fairy. Fly away. I see a dragon hurting Fear. Is that your friend?"
"Yes. It is Alice." I thought.
"Now, get out of there!" True urged.
I turned into a fairy, still badly hurt.
"Fay?" True said, no longer in my mind.
True was right next to me, along with my other friends,Happiness, and Trust. They helped me up, and carried me away.
The world went blurry, and I knew I was going to black out.
"Help..." I said one last time.
Then the world when dark.