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REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - BrookeTheSheep - 2012-12-03

I wanna start a private spin-off of this, with a new character, and you.


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - challenger410 - 2012-12-03

I'll get on Skype, but I can't call :/ sorry


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - GoldenLynx54 - 2012-12-03

No one pester me to write buuuuut.....we need a ending to this "Book" because we need to solve all the problems and everything should be fine.


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - BrookeTheSheep - 2012-12-03

What problems are left?
My plot line was neatly wrapped up, and tried with a bow.


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - GoldenLynx54 - 2012-12-03

Idk. But we need a proper ending, not just by ending with the last chapter done. C'mon. Someone do a neat-and-tidy ending! NOT ME *volunteers Brooke*


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - GoldenLynx54 - 2012-12-03

Idk. But we need a proper ending, not just by ending with the last chapter done. C'mon. Someone do a neat-and-tidy ending! NOT ME *volunteers Brooke*


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - Metazard - 2012-12-03

We should have a '10 years later' thing xD


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - SilverWolf101 - 2012-12-03

challenger410 wrote:
BrookeTheSheep wrote:It's not dead >.<

The climax happened. The story wrapped itself up.

We need a new problem, and that will be Haley's character. We will have a second "book"

Well tell haley to hurry the heck up. And btw I'm done in the story xD I've been neglected too muchTongue silver keeps saying "the rest of her family" and "all of my family" when I'm not there lol

Whenever I say that I think "Wait... Is Mason here? I can't remember" I don't go check.


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - BrookeTheSheep - 2012-12-03

BrookeTheSheep wrote:The next months in the Fairy Tree were nice.
I could do whatever I wanted. I mastered flying, and I can also make some mean cookies. If I multiply the ingredients, I can make them when I am human!
I was with True, and Trust. Happiness gave me my flying lessons. Around the time when it was Avi's birthday, something amazing happened.
Mason told me something.
He said that James is alive.
I burst into tears. I cried for a while, out of pure joy, of course.
I grabbed the cookie recipe, and headed to say goodbye to True, Trust, and Happiness.
'I'll miss you guys! I'll visit, I promise!" I said to them.
After a few tears, and MANY hugs, I was on my way.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I turned human. It felt odd not having my wings.
I knocked on the door.
"Hello?" I called.
"NO FRICKIN WAY," I heard someone say.
"Helloooo?" I said again, shaking with joy.
"F-Fay?" a small voice said.
"Avi?" I replied.
The door flew open, and little Avi jumped into my arms.
"FAAAYYY!!!!!!" she screamed.
"What!? FAY?!" I heard voices say from upstairs.
Ahri, Emma, and Alice came sprinting downstairs.
"What?! FAY!" they screamed while tackle-hugging me.
"Where were you?!" Ahri asked.
"I was with my childhood friends, at the Fairy Tree, with Mason. OH CRAP. I forgot Mason!" I said, exasperated.
"I missed you! It has been a month for so!" Emma said.
"I missed you too!!" I replied.
Alice gave me a huge hug. She gave me the biggest hug.
"Fay... I have bad news... James. We buried him today." Alice said.
"What the heck!? Dig him up! HE IS ALIVE!" I shouted.
"I don't think he is." Alice told me.
I stomped inside, and grabbed a knife. I cut a slit in my finger. It hurt, and bled.
"Look. I'm not immortal! James is fine!!" I screamed, worried he might run out of air.
"Coli, get the shovels," Ahri commanded.
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"Work, slaves! WORK!" I ordered, trying to lighten the mood by joking.
"Yes master Fay" Ahri said, sticking out her tongue.
While my family was digging, I decided to talk to Chives.
Walking into his room, I saw him sleeping. Only Chives would sleep through something like this.
I noticed James' bed was still there. I guessed Alice moved to me and Coli's room.
"Chives?" I said, to wake him up.
"F-Fay, shh... WAIT FAY?!" he said, springing out of bed.
He embraced me, and I told him everything. He said that James was dead, and I told him about him being alive.
We rushed outside to see James, and help unbury him.
~~~~~~~~~~
They were lifting the coffin out of the ground when I came out.
I saw a pounding on the top, and a bell ringing.
I rushed forward and opened the coffin.
James, pale, yet alive, was there. The insides of the coffin were shredded
James had claws, instead of hand.
As soon as he saw me, the claws faded.
We said nothing.
I leaned forward and wrapped my arms around him. He did the same to me. I sat there, sobbing, while James was still half in the coffin.I leaned back and kissed him, still crying.
Ahri and Emma carried James into his room, but I didn't let go of his hand.
They lay him down on his bed. He sat up, and I sat next to him, tears running down my face.
"Don't you EVER do that again." I told him.
"I won't, Fay," James said.
I kissed him again, then put my head on his shoulder. He had his arms tightly around me, like a protective force field.
I noticed Ahri, Emma, and Chives standing there.
Ahri was fighting back tears, while Chives had his arm around Emma.
Wow. When did THAT happen? It is so cute!
Things couldn't be better.

All was well.


I ended it for my character.


REVAMPING MCTOPIA STORY - challenger410 - 2012-12-03

Metazard wrote:We should have a '10 years later' thing xD

*10 years later*
"MASON! when is Fay coming back for you to get you from are secret hiding place? We are tired of you" said Truth
"Idk, she said she would be right back" I replied